The video pace feels way too slow and doesnt make the progress interesting to watch. I would reccomend you to watch this as a good reference for the pace you should aim to achieve at your videos. The AI voice cannot compare to how you can retale what you did about the project. Think of it like you’re presenting your work to your friends.
On the visual part, avoid showing the developer UI and show what you have done from the perspective of a player wanting to try the game. I’ve used the video in question becuase, it mostly has footage from the game itself and a viewer with no experience in development at all can tell what work has been done outright. You’re not doing a development tutorial after all.
If you’re trying to get more onto your thought process behind the development, show your thought process visually, not the development UI itself. For reference, i think this video executes this idea very well.