You made a typo: “Altough” instead of “Although”. You’re also missing a space after the period in “plots.Note”.
“You” should not be capitalized unless it is the first word in the sentence. You have it capitalized inappropriately in several places on the itch.io page. Your typos and your consistent English mistake with “you” makes me think there might be other English errors in the game. This is a text-based game, where I will spend most of my time reading. I don’t want to spend my time reading things that have lots of English errors. And I don’t think I’m the only potential player who decides not to play because of your English mistakes. I didn’t comb through your post specifically looking for errors to pick on, I honestly just noticed them without trying to and found them distracting and annoying. I’m human, I make mistakes and typos too, but I’m also not promoting a game whose gameplay involves lots of reading.
I don’t want to be mean, but you did ask for feedback so I feel it’s appropriate to share this. I do love the concept of playing as a villain protagonist, it’s what made me click on your post in the first place.
Sorry, I just saw Your comment! Thank you very much. In my language there is a custom, that when writing, you capitalize “You”, but I see that many English speakers treat it as an error, so I will change it.
Yeah, it’s probably correct in your language. Just want to clarify that in English we don’t just treat it as an error, it’s flat-out wrong to do that in English.
Similarly, we also do not capitalize “Your” unless it is the first word in a sentence.
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